Time to go

September 8, 2010

His father spoke;

“It’s the deadliest creature in the world.”

But it gave water grace simply by its presence

His mind melted towards her

He tried to turn it away

Again and again, he tried to turn his mind away

She’s the loveliest creature I have ever encountered

Never could I have dreamnt of such a creation as you

For you, life leaves it slumber and resumes it’s dance

These were his thoughts

But she was gone

He now felt the reality of his fathers’ words

21 Responses to “Time to go”

  1. Jingle said

    beautifully written.

    thanks for the contribution!

  2. Jingle said

    your focus is participants,
    let me know after you are done..

    I value your talent here…

    parents’ words do have values, they come from life time experiences.

  3. Talon said

    This has a lovely flow. I couldn’t help thinking this was about love and loss.

  4. amanda said

    “For you, life leaves it slumber and resumes it’s dance” what a great verse this poem makes me think of Mermaids? thanks for the great read!

  5. This is truly amazing written!=D I can feel the sadness flow within this poem :<

  6. wonderfully written, I had to read it twice once to read it a second time to enjoy it cuz it was good lol

  7. Olivia said

    Love.. Lady.. Loss..
    It was sad..

    This is my entry:

    All the very Best

  8. Dennis said

    Nice write! Thanks for sharing!

  9. megzone said

    WWOOWW… nice one here dear 🙂

    m here from Jingle’s rally…
    you can read my rally poem at

  10. notjeffery said

    One is sort of lead into simply staring at the screen remembering things said by important people in ones life.

    Thanks for sharing,


    (My entry for the rally)

  11. Jingle said

    how are you? please return favors to poets,
    let me know after you are done 18 NEW poets.

  12. I too had to read this twice. Well written my friend. Bisous, Love and Light, Sender

  13. Big sigh. The ultimate sadness, but I am still thinking mermaid here.

  14. Olivia said


    Hello, friend:

    Monday Poetry Potluck Is NOW open, linking is open from Sunday 8pm to Tuesday, 8pm, welcome join us by linking in 1 to 3 poems, you could use an old poem, the more you share, the happier we are…hurry up!
    Thanks in advance.
    Hope to see you in our lovely potluck…

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